Miss Freckles

oh i think i know who the narrator is, maybe fate or destiny or something? hmm, good introduction, although maybe you should start with a scene where something actually happens, ...

no don't scrap it! it's an amazing story for a fifteen-year-old (sorry, but i know what i've been doing at 15... and that's embarrassing compared to this) :) btw does ...

yep, i agree with ashley wholeheartedly. surprising and lovely to read :) only thing i noticed: Her thin lips curled themselves delicately into a smile that's a bit awkward, how ...

Night crept with the lavender fingers of dusk. this is where i stopped reading (then i went back, but only with the intention of giving you a more detailed review) ...

hmm, the flashback at the beginning confused me as well (it's not clear that it is one! put it in italics or something to distinguish from the rest) and then ...